• rootsbreadandmakka [he/him]@hexbear.netOP
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    10 months ago

    it’s built on like 20 layers of in-jokes and is completely inscrutable to anyone who hasn’t spent their entire lives in the deepest corners of internet culture, it’s full of new right dogwhistles, and it sounds like a gen z parody of 60s beatnik jazz writing by an AI trained exclusively on fascist blue check tweets. Tbh it’s nowhere near the worst thing ever been put to paper but I don’t think this should exist as a published book.

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        but this isn’t trying to talk to someone in another culture, this is a literary work. The writing is clunky due to the excessive memespeak and every sentence mostly just serves as an amassing of a bunch of obscure internet references, most of which do nearly nothing for the story and in many cases actually obscure the meaning of what she’s trying to say. There’s an idea here but it’s not pulled off well.